My journal 7

     I did a short conference with my English instructor who is Rebecca. She told me a few mistakes about my 1000-1250 words webtext. The first problem, the quotation needs add the date after author’s name in the first paragraph. The second problem, some words need be capitals, such as Word, Excels, and Power Point. The third, the font and size of words in the entire should stay the same. The fourth problem is a mistake about recommended reading. I should write the title of the text and link the website for the title. The last problem, I should follow rules of APA format in the reference part of my paper. These are problems about my paper above.


    By reading my partner’s peer review, I knew and found many problems of my paper. She thought I had a good thesis, but I still should focus more on my thesis and topic in my body paragraph. She thought my citations were confusing and ineffective. She didn’t like recommending reading of my webtext. She advised me to change the distracting background and to correct grammatical errors.

     I think I should improve my webtext paper. Firstly, I should fix my mistakes from conference. I should revision those parts what I should rewrite one by one. I should add date for quotations, should link the website for the title in recommending reading and follow APA format in reference. Secondly, I should fix my mistakes of contents. I must follow my thesis and topics in my body paragraph. I need try to find new sources and citations from internet. I will revise my recommending reading part in the next paper. I will go to writing center and try to fix my grammatical errors. I think I have a lot of works should be done in the next new paper; therefore, I should take care and work hard.